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Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and the minions for reading…
Copyright Ted Strutz
She stared out the window at the glassy water, wondering why she always chose the wrong guys. Cold eggs and toast sat mostly untouched on her plate. Her fork prodded the bland food, but didn’t lift any more toward her mouth.
She’d said some things she didn’t mean.
They both had.
She’d called him nearly every name under the sun.
He’d wished her dead.
She’d left crying.
Behind her, heavy boots plodded up the narrow isle between empty tables.
She started to turn- started to smile- knowing he’d come to apologize.
The wire that tightened around her neck suggested otherwise.
November 27th, 2013 at 9:58 AM
Now this is AnElephant’s kind of tale.
Casual, barely-provoked slaughter, nice one!
November 27th, 2013 at 11:41 AM
Grizzly tale and very well told.
November 27th, 2013 at 12:55 PM
She really did choose the wrong guy this time. What a gruesome tale!
November 27th, 2013 at 1:11 PM
definitely mr. wrong. that relationship was so messed up. guess the murder was just a thing waiting to happen. nice one. 🙂
November 27th, 2013 at 1:39 PM
Good buildup to your surprise ending.
November 27th, 2013 at 3:08 PM
Wow, to not see him but know who he was!
November 27th, 2013 at 3:44 PM
Boy, he’d better have an awful lot of money if he’s going to behave like that! If she survives, could you give her my number?
November 27th, 2013 at 4:17 PM
Well, I wasn’t expecting that, and nor was she! Good story with a great twist. 🙂
November 27th, 2013 at 5:39 PM
The end line threw me, great job 🙂
November 27th, 2013 at 6:40 PM
OMG! To the point. My smile quickly turned into a frown. A real surprise ending. Great!
November 27th, 2013 at 10:22 PM
Damn. Chose the wrong guy again.
November 27th, 2013 at 11:18 PM
Dear Adam,
This was a tight package with a killer ending. Loved it. The alternative to makeup sex? Haed telling, not knowing. Good job.
Aloha,
Doug
November 27th, 2013 at 11:41 PM
Oh….did not see that coming. Brilliant.
November 28th, 2013 at 3:00 AM
Whoah! Just my kind of story. Loved it!
November 28th, 2013 at 4:21 AM
Oh my…Mr. Not so right indeed. Well done.
November 28th, 2013 at 9:50 AM
Dear Adam,
I guess when he said he wanted her dead he meant it. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
November 28th, 2013 at 7:13 PM
Nice ending.
November 29th, 2013 at 11:26 AM
Great twist at the end…of the wires, another love story with an unhappy ending. It must be that kind of week. BTW, I believe ‘isle’ should be ‘aisle’. Nicely done, Adam!
November 29th, 2013 at 11:36 AM
Oh, my! Excellent buildup of tension and leading us in one direction then–Great ending!
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/puzzle-pieces/
November 29th, 2013 at 2:29 PM
This was simply brilliant! Great build-up to an excellent ending.
November 30th, 2013 at 10:34 AM
Eeek! Great story with a creepy twist.
November 30th, 2013 at 3:08 PM
And this is why one should eat their eggs whilst they are warm.
November 30th, 2013 at 8:45 PM
That’s pretty dark. I like the understatement in the last sentence. Yes…probably not there to apologize.
December 1st, 2013 at 1:41 PM
I had a feeling this could end only one of two ways! Yikes. Great suspense.
Congrats on your book. I’d love to read it.
December 2nd, 2013 at 6:11 AM
Like David, I loved the understatement of the last sentence. A very well crafted tale, Adam.
December 3rd, 2013 at 8:49 AM
ouch!What an apology!Poor girl!Loved this twisty tale:-)