I’m a bit late to the game today, but I didn’t have time to write anything before now. Very little editing done on this one, just enough to get it down to 100 words. Hope it’s decent.
As always, thanks to Madison Woods for the prompt and the Fictioneers for reading my ramblings.
My New Home
I told myself I was only going to stay a few hours to get out of the unbearable heat. Time is different inside. My watch has ticked off only five minutes, but outside the sun has danced across the sky at least eighteen times, I lost track when I turned my attention to the man stammering incoherently in the corner. He ran for the door and half a second later, he was gone- torn limb from limb. Blood and chunks of meat flew in every direction then faded away as the time raced along outside. I’m never leaving this place.
July 6th, 2012 at 8:14 AM
Eerie indeed and imagine being so frightened you don’t ever want to leave somewhere that can’t be safe. Well observed.
I’m on the list but for those who happen across, my offering is also here: https://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/07/06/reality-brought-forth/
July 7th, 2012 at 10:56 PM
The place is perfectly safe, it’s leaving that appears to be unsafe.
July 12th, 2012 at 11:25 AM
True 🙂
July 6th, 2012 at 8:44 AM
I wouldn’t be going anywhere either, after seeing that man torn to bloody bits. (Speaking of which, did you mean ‘chucks’ or ‘chunks’?) Just curious.
Aloha,
Doug
https://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/nurture-or-nature/
July 6th, 2012 at 9:07 AM
I did mean chunks. Lack of editing on my part. Thanks for catching my mistake.
July 6th, 2012 at 8:51 AM
I was going to ask also if it’s chunks of meat. Surely not chuck steak? Tee hee. Pretty gory. Made me want to huddle in the corner.
July 6th, 2012 at 8:51 AM
https://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/encampment.html
July 7th, 2012 at 11:01 PM
Yeah it was meant to be chunks. My lack of editing makes me unhappy with this one. I rewrote it and am thinking of possibly posting the edited version, but I might not. Thanks for the read.
July 6th, 2012 at 9:21 AM
Ooh, nasty stuff. The story, not the writing 😉 I love the concept of time slowing inside the building. You wove a lot into 100 words. 🙂
We’re here: https://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/searching-for-sarah
July 7th, 2012 at 11:04 PM
I like the concept too, but overall I’m just not happy with this one. Thanks for the read anyway!
July 6th, 2012 at 10:20 AM
I don’t know if that last line is a declaration or prediction. Either way, an unexpected outcome. As usual, I enjoyed it!
Mine is on the list at #15 or here: https://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/07/05/flash-friday-fiction-11/#entry
July 7th, 2012 at 11:06 PM
I think the last line is probably a bit of both. I think you’d enjoy the rewrite more. But it’s on my thumb drive, which I left at work, so if I do end up posting it, it won’t be until at least Monday.
July 6th, 2012 at 12:58 PM
What other wonders lurk in those dark and damp corners? Could be another door to venture through. Or you could always go pet the monster and take your chances, maybe he’s not hungry so soon after his recent kill.
July 7th, 2012 at 11:09 PM
I wasn’t clear enough with this one. There wasn’t actually a monster. It’s the time shift’s effect on the body that was meant to be the culprit. The body can easily adapt to the slowing of time, but the up shift was too much to handle in such a quickly delivered dose. That’s my fault for not being more clear. Should have put more time into editing before posting.
July 6th, 2012 at 1:56 PM
Welcome to the Twilight Zone.
You never fail to give us the gory details, Adam.
https://logo-ligi.com/2012/07/06/healing/
July 7th, 2012 at 11:10 PM
You may not, but I view this one as a failure. I’m not happy with it at all. There’s always next time I suppose.
July 6th, 2012 at 6:06 PM
This was great. It’s the simplest things that can terrify, right? Scary and fascinating at the same time.
Here’s mine: https://pinionpost.com/2012/07/06/kyawe/
July 7th, 2012 at 11:11 PM
Simple things are often the only things that can truly terrify. Complex things can be broken down and analyzed. Simple things often cannot.
July 7th, 2012 at 1:23 PM
Ew. Note to self: don’t stay at this place; their spa is killer. Gruesome, but I liked it. 🙂
Oh mine is here if you want to read: https://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/07/05/desert-warrior/
July 7th, 2012 at 11:12 PM
Staying here could be hazardous to the health. Not my best effort, by far, though. I’m a bit disappointed in this one as a whole. I’ll have to work extra hard next time around to make up for it.
July 8th, 2012 at 12:15 AM
Haha. I said the same thing about something I wrote today. We to join the insecure writers club.
July 8th, 2012 at 8:47 PM
Only if we can make a commercial where someone says “I’m not only the president, I’m also a member!”