PHOTO PROMPT – © Copyright Jean L. Hays
“You think too much,” he said.
“You don’t think enough,” she replied.
“It’s playing mind games. I’d bet it’s on the other side of that door waiting for you to be stupid enough to open it.”
“How do you know?”
“Open the door and find out.”
She picked up a broken board from the floor and handed it to him. “I’ll open the door. You hit it.”
He shrugged. “If you say so.”
She yanked the door open. He swung the board. It cracked her skull when it connected.
He stood over her, laughing. “Told you it was playing games.”
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Written for Friday Fictioneers. I’m not sure how I feel about this one, but I wrote it, so here it is.
Also, just a note. I’m starting my prompts back up. They faded away before, but starting this month Storybook Corner is back and starting next month Six on the Sixth is back. Please do take part. It’ll be fun. I promise.
January 8th, 2015 at 11:22 PM
That was wicked .. Haha caught me from the first sentence. Did not know where it was going and it did not disappoint
January 9th, 2015 at 12:06 AM
Yikes! That got me in - I didn’t expect that. Well set up. Very dark.
January 9th, 2015 at 12:08 AM
Well…bummer! She really fell for that old trick, didn’t she?
January 9th, 2015 at 12:58 AM
I should have seen that coming… but I didn’t. Nice job, Adam. ;-)
January 9th, 2015 at 4:13 AM
Sinister. The use of the word ‘it’ is very effective.
January 9th, 2015 at 4:36 AM
Was hooked from the start but I didn’t expect it either
January 9th, 2015 at 4:47 AM
Ouch! Didn’t see that end coming.
January 9th, 2015 at 5:26 AM
Dear Adam,
Mind games can be dangerous. This certainly was for her. She should’ve done some more thinking I think. I’d say he thought more than she thought he did, eh? Now I’ll leave you with my thoughtless comments and say that I liked your story despite its painful (for her) ending.
Shalom,
Rochelle
January 9th, 2015 at 5:33 AM
Dear Adam,
They’re not going to be together for long, are they? You were out there a ways when your wrote this. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
January 9th, 2015 at 8:05 AM
Adam, One of your darker tales. Great twist at the end. Well done. :) — Suzanne
January 9th, 2015 at 8:39 AM
You got me! Hooked and then bam! Didn’t see it coming. Great story!
January 10th, 2015 at 9:16 AM
Late to the comment party but echoing the above comments. Nicely crafted and executed.
janet
January 12th, 2015 at 9:42 AM
Very clever, darling. Dark but funny at the same time.
January 12th, 2015 at 7:06 PM
Well Adam, You are t he smart one aren’t you? Clever and entertaining! Nan :)
January 13th, 2015 at 2:38 PM
I don’t think I want to know who/what ‘it’ is. I mean I do, but I really don’t! I’m looking forward to finding out what Storybook Corner and Six on the Sixth are.