PHOTO PROMPT-Copyright-Melanie Greenwood
He sat on the bench across the street and watched. She met a friend for lunch, which seemed to be par for the course. For a few minutes he thought she’d be alone for the first time since he’d started watching her. Her friend was only running late. She had her usual-a Caesar salad. Her friend ordered a club sandwich. They talked and laughed while he dreamt of his future with her from the other side of the road.
Eventually, she would be by herself. He caressed the chloroform soaked rag in his pocket and smiled. There’s always tomorrow.
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Written for Friday Fictioneers. I’m a bit surprised I didn’t go in more of a Halloween direction this week, but that isn’t where the prompt took me.
October 29th, 2014 at 7:37 AM
Sounds like he’s got a plan. And not a good one.
October 29th, 2014 at 7:48 AM
You know what they say about the best laid plans.
October 29th, 2014 at 7:47 AM
Very sinister.
Claire
October 29th, 2014 at 7:51 AM
He just wants to make her his. Can’t you see he loves her? Just kidding. This guy is whacked out of his gourd.
October 29th, 2014 at 8:11 AM
Too scary…the thought that someone is watching me across the street with a rag soaked in chloroform. A sinister story, indeed.
October 29th, 2014 at 9:19 AM
Great story. Nice take on the prompt, I think. Creative. Diabolical, for sure. *sinister laugh!* lol
October 29th, 2014 at 9:24 AM
Adam, This makes a person almost afraid to go anywhere alone. Spooky O_o Well written as usual. :) — Susan
October 29th, 2014 at 9:31 AM
YIkes! I thought he was waiting to make a move, just not that move!
October 29th, 2014 at 9:40 AM
You know, I’d do better at providing the half-drunken rants if I read your stories after 5:00 in the evening, but here it is morning, and you’ve dragged me in already. I haven’t even had coffee or my morning smoothie yet, and I have a Royal hangover that has everything to do with baseball and nothing to do with substances other than too much sugar. But about your story . . .
Excellent work this week, Adam. Your tale is skillfully woven and the sinister twist at the end comes smoothly although it is a surprise. Bravo!
Marie Gail
October 29th, 2014 at 10:41 AM
Oooh… Spooky! Stalky! Well done.
October 29th, 2014 at 9:13 PM
Rather a twisted tale… Good work.
October 29th, 2014 at 9:33 PM
You are one wicked dude! But you surprised me here; well done!
October 29th, 2014 at 9:54 PM
That’s creepy, the patience he has for it. Although, he needs to be careful about carrying chloroform around. I have this mental image of him passing out from fumes while he’s driving. :)
October 29th, 2014 at 11:07 PM
Okay, I thought my talking furniture was creepy. This beats it by a mile. Very creepily done!
October 30th, 2014 at 5:43 AM
Dear Adam,
She’s probably oblivious to the fact that this whack job is watching her every move. The creepiest part of this is that it’s more realistic than we’d care to admit. Well executed right down to the ending twist.
Shalom,
Rochelle
October 30th, 2014 at 6:41 AM
Very very dark. Loved it. Well done.
October 30th, 2014 at 8:04 AM
What a pleasant character you’ve created here. He better watch he doesn’t get chloroform burns from that rag!
October 30th, 2014 at 8:54 AM
I knew there would be a surprise ending. Well, perhaps not from you!
DJ
October 30th, 2014 at 8:56 AM
Another creepy story from the Ickes stables! I was thinking he was trying to catch his wife with another man but this is a much better story.
October 30th, 2014 at 10:03 AM
Something wicked this way comes. This gave me a chill. Well done.
October 30th, 2014 at 2:37 PM
Nasty - a stalker story always makes me shiver.
October 31st, 2014 at 5:31 AM
Dark and creepy…yikes! I hope she finds a new coffee hang out!!!!!
October 31st, 2014 at 12:56 PM
Oh my! That’s creepy.
October 31st, 2014 at 6:54 PM
He doesn’t sound like a gentleman at all!
Lily
November 1st, 2014 at 10:31 AM
Good one! I began a new flash site where you get a photo prompt and the first sentence to the story. You get to finish the story! I hope that you can take a moment to check out Mondays Finish the Story! Be well! ^..^
November 1st, 2014 at 10:49 PM
A chilling story. He’s a cool one; and she needs to stop being so predictable.
November 3rd, 2014 at 1:20 AM
Dear Adam, You are so good with this story! My goodness, creepy! Nicely done - Does she believe in ‘conceal and carry’? Nan :)