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Boarded over, forgotten, and neglected. The weight of his despair hit him like a ton of bricks, topped with another for good measure.
He’d given her thirty years of his life and she just up and left at the first signs of affection from the young Spaniard.
She would pay for her insolence. They both would.
Their satisfying screams for mercy floated from the trunk.
Gary tramped hard on the accelerator. The sedan careened recklessly toward the cliff and the vast ocean beyond.
He jumped from the speeding vehicle and skidded across the dirt road. Bloodied, but alive, he grinned.
December 5th, 2013 at 2:42 AM
Hell, that guy really takes things personally. Nice one Adam.
December 5th, 2013 at 8:52 PM
He certainly does. Thanks for reading, Sandra.
December 5th, 2013 at 2:55 AM
Sounds like someone you wouldn’t want to cross!
I liked the second ton of bricks “for good measure”.
December 5th, 2013 at 8:53 PM
I think it depends how you cross him that would determine how far he’d go.By most accounts he’s probably been a pretty decent guy who just snapped.
December 5th, 2013 at 5:19 AM
Wow, Adam, you’re vicious today! What’s gotten into you sending people over the cliff? You should be happy and well-adjusted like me ….
December 5th, 2013 at 8:54 PM
I suppose some frustration at work made me want to push someone off a cliff. Doing it this way is legal…
December 5th, 2013 at 7:20 AM
Bloody hell, that was violent. Did the milk of human kindness spill on the floor last night?
December 5th, 2013 at 8:55 PM
Human kindness comes in milk form now? Awesome! Is it as delicious as it sounds?
December 5th, 2013 at 7:24 AM
wow, that guy must be pretty enraged to pull a stunt like that-jumping from a speeding vehicle and stuff. great story 🙂
December 5th, 2013 at 8:56 PM
Yeah. He could have just as easily backed into a lake or something. Guess he wanted to add some flair.
December 5th, 2013 at 11:09 AM
Ah I mourn the sedan. And the young Spaniard 😉
December 5th, 2013 at 8:56 PM
You are right to mourn the sedan. It was the innocent victim in this whole messy situation.
December 5th, 2013 at 12:44 PM
Has his temper always been this bad? No wonder she left with the Spaniard.
December 5th, 2013 at 8:58 PM
I think it was more he was one of those guys who let her walk all over him. When he finally had enough he chose to follow the “go big or go home” rule.
December 6th, 2013 at 12:00 PM
Well he certainly went big.
December 5th, 2013 at 1:49 PM
Misogyny, darling? Really? Sigh…. this reminds me of ’97 Bonnie & Clyde by Eminem, the master of the misogynistic. The young Spaniard puts me in the mind of The Count of Monte Cristo. Good writing, nonetheless.
December 5th, 2013 at 3:36 PM
A screaming Spaniard, the Count of Monte Cristo? Hmm, interesting thought pattern here.
December 5th, 2013 at 3:38 PM
the connections my mind comes up with are often not even clear to me, darling.
December 5th, 2013 at 9:02 PM
Perhaps our definitions of misogyny differ. He didn’t do what he did because he hates women. He was hurt by her actions and wanted revenge. Simple as that. Nothing he did was because she was a woman. He would have done the same if his partner had been a man.
December 5th, 2013 at 9:37 PM
Good writing, Adam. Girls in trunks of cars just always get my back up. No offence intended.
December 5th, 2013 at 9:51 PM
No offense taken. Igniting a reaction in readers is what writing is all about.
December 5th, 2013 at 3:34 PM
Yeah, way to go, great story.
AnElephant loves a tale with a moral!
December 5th, 2013 at 9:04 PM
Glad AnElephant enjoyed my little tale of vengeance.
December 6th, 2013 at 5:36 AM
Dear Adam,
What a delightful way to channel work frustrations. 😉 His grin at the end is a nice touch. Good one.
shalom,
Rochelle
December 6th, 2013 at 8:59 PM
It really is a good way to kill someone without actually killing them. Even if the character that dies is nothing like them.
December 6th, 2013 at 6:50 AM
Well,well,they got what they deserved-not good to cheat-good for him and hopefully next time around,he meets someone more loyal:-)
December 6th, 2013 at 9:00 PM
Chances are he’s in another country by now. Perhaps he’ll meet a nice lady there.
December 8th, 2013 at 6:59 AM
Ha!ha!Good for him and I wish him all the luck:-)
December 6th, 2013 at 11:59 AM
That’s quite the revenge rush!
December 6th, 2013 at 9:01 PM
A dish best served cold. Can’t get much colder than plunging someone into the ocean locked in a trunk.
December 6th, 2013 at 4:04 PM
Great one!
Here’s mine: https://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/bffs-not/
December 6th, 2013 at 9:02 PM
Thanks!
December 6th, 2013 at 6:18 PM
Despair can cause all kinds of havoc. This is despair in folds. Well done!
December 6th, 2013 at 9:02 PM
Despair certainly isn’t something that should be taken lightly.
December 9th, 2013 at 7:10 PM
definition of a survivor. well done. think about something other than “ton of bricks.” it’s kind of cliche, and i’m sure you can beat that with your own version.
December 9th, 2013 at 8:43 PM
Good advice, and I’m sure you’re right. I phoned it in with that line. I also phoned it in with phoned it in. Thanks for reading.
December 9th, 2013 at 9:24 PM
thanks for writing.